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IELTS Writing Samples

IELTS essay samples (writing task 2), report and letter samples (writing task 1) with Band Scores, marked by IELTS teachers, including comments and suggestions on how to increase your score

IELTS essay, topic: Since obesity may be caused by fast food, should the government put a tax on fast food?

This is a model response to a Writing Task 2 topic from High Scorer’s Choice IELTS Practice Tests book series (reprinted with permission). This answer is likely to score IELTS Band 9.

Set 2 General Training book, Practice Test 8

Writing Task 2

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic:

It seems clear that obesity in today’s society is to some extent due to the availability of fast food.

Should governments place a tax on fast food to reduce the amount of fast food consumed?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

You should write at least 250 words.

Answer

Obesity has become a common problem in western societies and this is partly due to the availability of fast food at low prices. To tackle this problem, it has been suggested that governments should increase the tax on fast foods in order to reduce the amount of pre-cooked meals consumed. I personally believe that this is a sound idea, because especially young people, who have less money, will be discouraged from buying food at quick service restaurants.

The main reason for the high consumption of junk food is that it is a cheap alternative to healthy meals. A salad for example often is twice as expensive as a burger, resulting in more people eating the burger than the salad. As a result, people prepare fewer meals themselves and eat more mass-produced food instead. In my opinion, it should not be possible to sell fast food at a lower price than staple food. By making takeaway meals more expensive than vegetables and fruit, people would change their eating habits, as they would want to save money.

Another way to reduce consumption of fast food would be to prohibit its promotion. A similar approach was taken in terms of advertising cigarettes and one can say that this approach has been successful to some extent. Additionally, commercials for fast food often target young children through offering inducements, such as the toys in the happy meal at McDonalds for example. The children are persuaded to demand a happy meal, yet often do not necessarily want to eat the food contained in it. The only thing they want is the toy. If advertising junk food were forbidden, the number of children consuming pre-cooked meals would be reduced and therefore the number of obese children would decrease as well.

In conclusion, governments should put a tax on fast food to reduce the amount consumed in order to decrease the number of obese people. By placing a tax on fast food and making it more expensive than healthy raw foods, people would began to eat more healthily. If additionally the advertising of quick service restaurants were banned, the number of obese people would decrease even more drastically.

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IELTS Letter, topic: Inviting a friend to a music concert

Write a letter to your friend inviting him/her to a music concert. Please say:

– Where and when does the concert start?
– What type of music will be played there?
– Why do you think your friend will enjoy it?

Answer

Dear Sally,

Hope this letter finds you well. I haven’t forgotten how much you helped me, my lovely friend, when you looked after my house and my puppies while I travelled to Bali last month.

To thank you I bought two tickets to a music concert that is going to be held in the city hall next Friday. The concert will start at 8 pm. I hope you will be free by then and will be able to join me.

Different bands are going to play rock-n-roll music, your favorite kind, so I am sure we are going to have fun there.

Although I was only able to purchase two tickets for us, my friends Anna and Diana, whom you met at my last birthday party also bought tickets online. We can all go together, the more, the merrier. So, let me know if you are going to be able join us. Give my love to your family.

Looking forward to seeing you at the city hall next Friday.

Love,
Patricia

This letter includes all the required items from the task statement. There is a clear logical flow of information and the use of paragraphing is appropriate. The use of informal vocabulary is suitable for this type of letter. The writer demonstrated good control of grammar. Overall this letter seems to be worthy of IELTS Band 8.

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