Financial education should be a mandatory component of the school program. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Children in this modern era have all the magnificent toys, food and many more other interesting things than. They are bound to have a craving all this stuff that they see. In other words children will be spending money on anything they want or . Even some adults these days have some kind of craving to the thing
However, there are some children that are capable of in a very way even before they learned it at school. children would have learnt from their families or people around them. They manage money better, compared to the other children from wealthier families for whom spending is not a problem.
This essay needs work. In the first paragraph you should have introduced the problem and mentioned what the two opinions are. Some of your sentences are unclear and their structure needs improvement (see comments underlined in blue for details). Also, there are arguments for financial education and no arguments against, which means that the task is only partially covered. Overall, looks like a Band 6 – 6.5 essay.
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