Without capital punishment our lives are less secure and crimes or violence increase. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Serious crimes need capital punishment so that the are unable to get involved in the crime in the future. However, they want to stop the acts of violation in the future then it would be better to .
Overall, I agree with the fact that punishment is the way to avoid the
and hence our lives become more secure. If the wrongdoer wants to be a good
and there is a particular financial or personal problem that led him to the wrong way, then it would be the nice option to forgive him and try to solve the problem he
. Although by this way, some bad
may become effective
of the society but some do not bring themselves to the right path because they are
. The person that
involved in the crime and never
to stop the law-breaking act should be punished in
extremely serious way. However, it totally depends on the nature of crime. Some
to a capital punishment and some may require a small penalty. The law-making institutions are responsible to bring the bad man to the right level of punishment that he deserves. If there is weak legislation to properly handle the offender, it may
for the good
. The government should be the responsible authority to provide a secure and better state to live. Laws should be implemented and executed in the most proper way that
not allow the offender to commit violent acts or to break the law in any way and to any extent. To sum up, it is the responsibility of the state
to stop people
involved in crime. It may be done through solving the problems of the people that led them to commit that
act or by the punishment accordingly.
Where are the paragraphs? This is a good essay; however there are many small mistakes that might cost you dearly. There are also several unclear expressions and grammatical errors.
You should rewrite it, giving more thought to what is required, e.g. paragraphs.
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