IELTS Letter, topic: Writing to a pen pal

You have a pen friend living in another country and he/she is curious about the major news items in your country.

Dear Amy,

How are you? . I remember in the last letter you had mentioned current affairs in India,. The Reserve Bank of India has increased REPO rate by .50 basis points, which has lead to an increase in home loans’ rates.

Rain in INDIA is too heavy this year the past two years. Two years back Mumbai was flooded and all the normal life was halted for 1 – 2 days.

Our President Dr. A.P.J. Abdul Kalam, have finished his tenure on of July this year. Now we have Mrs. Patil as our new and First lady President in the Indian history. She has political background whereas Dr. A.P.J. Abdul Kalam didn’t have.

After 14 years, people behind the Mumbai bomb blast in 1993 are finally being punished. Some are being sentenced to death and some have to serve a long time in prison.

Take care. Be in Touch.

This letter is not bad. It has the right structure (apart from the first paragraph, last sentence of which should be in the second paragraph) and covers the task, the vocabulary and the structure of sentences are fine. The logical connection of paragraphs needs some work, because it seems as though you are jumping from issue to issue, instead of linking them smoothly.

Add some more personal touch in the last paragraph, ask how they are doing or what are their news. Don’t forget to sign your name in the end. See comments for detailed corrections. Overall, this looks like a Band 6.5 letter.

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You didn’t write to me in ages
being interested in
add here: so let me give you some local news
This should really be in the second paragraph – the first is just an introduction
compared to
instead of figures use words, twenty first

IELTS Letter, topic: Writing to a manager about problems at work

You recently took a part-time job working for a local company. After a few weeks, you realized there were some problems with the job.
Write a letter to the manager of the company. In your letter

– Explain why you took the job
– Describe the problems that you experienced
– Suggest that what could be done about them

Dear Manager,

I am writing to explain you some difficulties, which I am since last month, and I would like to inform you.

I am working a part time job with you in the evening and doing my in software programming in the morning and my financial problem, accomplish my skills in my field. there are many with the computer system here.

First of all, not fully equipped with hardware and secondly . Basically we are working for many famous companies to provide them software and also we assist them in case of any troubleshooting.

Consequently, if the company provides the latest machines with updated software to their workers, it will not be merely expedient for the company reputation and progress. It can also give an edge to the Programmer, Designer and Hardware/Network Engineer to learn and work well for the company clients in a better way. In this way, we can save our plethora of time and in fascinating work.

I am looking forward to your passing my suggestion to higher management and hopefully they will take some corrective and optimistic action as soon as possible.

Yours sincerely,

A.I.N

This letter is too long 200 words instead of the advised 150-165. It is too extensive, I suggest that you make it shorter by summarizing some of the sentences. There are some confusing expressions and some incomplete sentences, the grammar needs attention. See comments (underlined in blue) for details. Overall, looks like Band 6.5 letter.

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experiencing
Masters degree
not only to help with
but also to
However,
problems
It is (you are referring to the computer system)
rephrase: the software in it is not updated enough
return we can produce some
 

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