January 2009

You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country.
Task: Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost.

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to ask for information about the seminar that you are conducting during the next week.

I am an electronics wholesale dealer in Pakistan and I am interested to take part in this work-related seminar. I think that it would be very beneficial for me to see the latest electronic appliances and have an excellent opportunity to make contacts with different companies. Therefore, I need to get some information in detail such as the total period of time your seminar takes and the leaflets of different scheduled programs. , I have a plan to come with my two staff members accommodation and total expenditure, which you have estimated for each person.

You could send the above-mentioned information to my e-mail address. I would like to receive it as soon as possible before the departure.

I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully,
Athar Nafees

This is a good letter. It covers the task, the information is organized well and each paragraph covers all the necessary details. There are some inaccuracies (see suggested changes in the comments underlined in blue). Overall, this looks like a Band 7 letter.

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You have a pen friend living in another country and he/she is curious about the major news items in your country.

Dear Amy,

How are you? . I remember in the last letter you had mentioned current affairs in India,. The Reserve Bank of India has increased REPO rate by .50 basis points, which has lead to an increase in home loans’ rates.

Rain in INDIA is too heavy this year the past two years. Two years back Mumbai was flooded and all the normal life was halted for 1 – 2 days.

Our President Dr. A.P.J. Abdul Kalam, have finished his tenure on of July this year. Now we have Mrs. Patil as our new and First lady President in the Indian history. She has political background whereas Dr. A.P.J. Abdul Kalam didn’t have.

After 14 years, people behind the Mumbai bomb blast in 1993 are finally being punished. Some are being sentenced to death and some have to serve a long time in prison.

Take care. Be in Touch.

This letter is not bad. It has the right structure (apart from the first paragraph, last sentence of which should be in the second paragraph) and covers the task, the vocabulary and the structure of sentences are fine. The logical connection of paragraphs needs some work, because it seems as though you are jumping from issue to issue, instead of linking them smoothly.

Add some more personal touch in the last paragraph, ask how they are doing or what are their news. Don’t forget to sign your name in the end. See comments for detailed corrections. Overall, this looks like a Band 6.5 letter.

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