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Dieting can change a person’s life for the better or ruins one’s health completely. What’s your opinion?

Almost 90% of the women today wants a beautiful figure. That is why we are able to find a diet programme almost everywhere in the country. Most of the women have tought and gone on a diet before either to slim dowm or just for health problem.

A proper diet programme will help you not only to slim down but also to have a healtier eating habit. For instance taking more vegetables and fruits that meat, avoid fried food and carbonated drinks. For a diet programme we shouldn’t cut one self from food and water. There are some diet programme from the doctors that help you to have a healty heart like the “Three day diet” which we can find on the internet. This programme allows you to eat fruits and also some meat. This way of dieting you will be able to avoid some of the health problems in the future like diebetes or a heart attack.

However some people do not only go on a diet but they avoid eating and go hungry for the whole day. All they have is just either water or juices. Also there a people who buy special diet programme over the counter like taking pills which are not approved by the health department and without consulting a doctor first. They do not follow the basic rules of dieting and this will lead them to some serious health problems like disfuctional of some body parts or, even worse, death.

In my opinion there is notting wrong going on a diet as long as we follow the correct way of eating and for a good reason to diet.

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People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge).

Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Many people attend to university or collage after their high school years for several reason which they choose by them self. I believe the most reason that why people attend to university or collage to have new experiences on life , to prepare for career, and to increase their knowledge of their personality on life.

Firstly, many people tippy title=”attend to university or collage”]again, repetition[/tippy] to have new experience on life. Many students leave their home and move to live by them self when they go to university. This is the first time that they had to create resolution by them self without their parents help. Creating resolution will increase their knowledge of themselves. Moreover, students on the university can meet different students from different nationalities and religions so students can learn about different culture around the world.

Secondly, many people go to university or collage to prepare for career. Career training is becoming more important nowadays to young people than old people. At collage, students learn many skills about the real career life and they intern to internship with a lot of chances. All of these things prepare them for the career life.

Also, students attend to university or collage to increase their self-knowledge of their personality on life. They attend for that to increase their knowledge in subject which they find interesting. For example, many students study science because they are iinterest in science but they work on the business area.

To sum up, I think people should not only focus on a career when they go to university or collage. They have to follow to have new experience and knowledge about their personality and the huge world around them which they live in.

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