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“Some people say that education system is the only critical factor to development of a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?”

Education plays a vital role in the development of a country. Therefore, some people think education system is the only important factor for the development of a country and they may be right.

Education is a foundation of well developed and cultured society. It is rightly said, ‘education is a ladder for success’. If all the people of any country are educated then they becomes broadminded, civilized and progressive forward. Educated society improves standard of life as well.

Besides this, education also creates a good employment opportunity and therefore country do not have to suffer big problem like unemployment. Educated peoples are more aware of problems such as pollution and many more. Country becomes technologically advanced because of educated people.

Not only this, but by giving full importance to education, the nations can get rid of problems like iliteracy, poverty, unemployment and poppulation growth that retard the progress of nation. The crime rate can also be kept under check. The standard of living of the people wil go up. If the nations wants to be progressive it is very important that the people are more educated and progressive forward. Any country can be more technologically advanced and developed because of education.

However, there are some more factors also plays important role in development of country. Such as governments has to encouraged people to do so._

In conclusion, I would like to say that good education system lead to a developed country.

This essay needs some work. It has a good structure and the sentences show enough fluency, but the last body paragraph needs to be corrected by adding another 2-3 sentences to it. In total, the number of words here is 235 – under required 250, that will cost some marks. Also there are some repetitions and grammatical errors. Overall, looks like a Band 6 essay.

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Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Evaluation of the importance of timing is so important, many people they are sticking to past to show their present’s importance, while many shows that no need to even remember their past because it would not help them at all. It is very controversial and complicated matter.

Do not look to past, many people believe on this statement, for many reasons: Firstly, all of us had committed many mistakes which we would not like to remember, it will affect their present because can create some problems with our families as example. Secondly, instead of remembering those past trials, get the benefit of your present time.

Although of what said in previous opinion, many people sticking to their past to give them well push in their present. It can give you a way of learning from your mistakes, and good chance to try to avoid any thing can lead to past failure.

Moreover, Success will not come without failure, every body should try his aim, even if failed, and it is a big success if they try it again and again. In addition, past is our culture and heritage which we will not forget it at all, it is a matter of value to our present, future till will die.

To sum up, in my opinion, we can not live without past, it is our value of life. Beside it can create your experiences in to solve your problems better in the future.

This essay is too short – it should be at least 250 words and writing less means loosing marks. The structure of sentences needs work and so does grammar. Do not address the “audience”, write in general (See the comments for the last sentence of third paragraph). Overall, looks like a Band 6 work. See comments underlined in blue for more details.

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