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Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing crossword puzzles. Others feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time. Discuss.

As we are a human we naturally need to take rest on leisure time to recover thestress of work and everyday life. In fact, every individual need to do what they want and belong to them. Personally, I prefer to be active during this time because it is feel right to me better. Moreover, people are free for what they do on their leisure time, and nobody can say what it is the best.

Some people want to relax after their working day. These people prefer to relax by watching movies, reading or doing some massage. People who have a physically jobs such as doctor, teacher and builder may choose these type of activities. If you are doctor, you may feel that you want to take rest for your body after work and you don’t want to do a five kilometer run after work, because you are already physically tired.

On the other hand, some people choose to be active on their leisure time because they do very sitting jobs. For example, these people many spend all day sitting on a chair and do their work. At the end of a working day, they may be have a backache, and all of their body become tired so they need to stretch their arms and improve their health by doing some activity such as going to the gym or swimming.

To sum up, the important things that people want to stay healthy by choosing what is best for them. In my view, the wrong way to stay at home in your leisure time if you have a setting job.

This essay needs work. It has the right structure and covers the task. However there are many poorly structured sentences, many of the sentences are too simple and don’t have enough complexity, there are grammatical errors and incorrect usage of prepositions (see comments underlined in blue). Overall, looks like a Band 6 – 6.5 essay.

Some people say education is the only critical factor to development of a country. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

One the one hand good education is a highly recommended skill in the developed countries, on the other hand the highest wish of many people in regions of poverty. But what makes education to the key factor for the development of a country?

We must acknowledge that education is something that we all need. The differences are just what we learn. Mostly the educational horizon of poor and less educated people has more to deal with their personal situation than with problems of bigger effects on a country. Attending school is sometimes too expensive and it does not feed a family.

Nevertheless there must be a reason for education. For me it looks like some countries have realized that Education is the key for the globalization process. If we take India for example we can see that a change in the educational system had changed the economy of the country. The country has changed from a poor region to a high potential aria for IT knowledge.

In regard to this fact it is a must that the Governments of less developed countries take the power of education serious and offer it to a wide range of people. Spending money for education is the key tippy title=”for”]to[/tippy] a new future effects on the economy and the social life. All in all I agree with the importance of education for the development of a country. Less knowledge leads to poverty and not to knowledge that has wide effects. Learning and Knowledge is Power and an investment in the near future and therefore it has to be an official task.

This essay covers the task. It has a good structure, however the conclusion paragraphs is too big – consider splitting it into 2 paragraphs. As to structure of sentences, there are several sentences that should be rephrased (see comments for suggestions). Grammar also needs some attention (see underlined in blue comments for details). Overall, looks like a band 6.5 essay.