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You can get up-to-date news from radio, TV and Internet. Which one you think is the best to know about news.

Nowadays, there are several channels to get news, such as radio, TV, newspaper and internet. I think internet is the best among these. In my essay, I am going to explain why.

Since its invention, the Internet has been keeping booming as a prospective industry. Not only because it is a combination of texts, audios and videos, but also due to its convinience. It has threatened the domination of spreading news of the traditional media, and, I would say, is about to take control.

We can find everything we want on internet - latest news, books, songs, movies, cartoons… whatever. With radio, we can merely hear. Compared with newspaper, radio and TV can provide the lastest information. For instance, it was immediately availalbe of the breaking news of the Americans’ attacking on Iraq, as well as that the Twin Towers of New York were destroyed on September 11, 2001. __ However, we just cannot carry TV 24/7.

Internet is a convinient way of getting information, as long as your mobile phone is connected or you possess a laptop. When I am on a vehicle, I usually have my cellphone connected to internet, then browse what happend in the past few hours, or log in MSN to begin a conversation with my friends. Reading newspaper is also a good way to kill time, but for me, a youngster, it is not so modern as “surfing online while being transported”.

The traditional media will never disappear, though internet has taken a big advantage in the competition. And definitely, there is still a long way for internet to go. Anyway, internet benefits me the most, and I highly appreciate it.

This essay needs some work. It covers the task and it’s structure is fine. However the structure of the sentences needs attention (see suggestions in comments underlined in blue). Some words like”whatever” should be avoided. Your usage of prepositions is not accurate and there are grammatical and spelling errors as well. Overall, looks like a Band 6.5 essay.

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Millions of people every year move to English- speaking countries such as Australia, Britain or America, in order to study at school, college or university. Why do so many people want to study in English? Why is English such an important international language?

Nowadays, language becomes a major factor to become a successful person. Many people prefer to study abroad to English-speaking countries because English is an international language. There is no doubt that the best way to increase the English language skill is use English language daily so if people study in English speaking countries, their English skill will be improved automatically and it will give them some advantages such as they can work in many countries or they are able travelling to many different places without studying other languages. This essay will describe more details why English is an important international language.__

Firstly, English is widely used by a lot of countries and at the present, the world traders are currently developing rapidly. In order to compete with people from different countries, it is very essential to be able to communicate with English language. For example, China has been improving a lot in many sectors. They are able to compete with other countries because many people in China aware the important English language and they are trying hard to study English.

Secondly, many companies prefer to employ people who can speak English because if the companies create new branch in different countries, the employers are able to move the new branch without employ new people again and the branch company is still able to communicate with the central company. In fact, One of the largest companies in the world (Google) has created some branch in different countries and each of the Google employers are able to discuss or communicate even tough they are in different countries because they use English to communicate.

In conclusion, many people move to English speaking countries for further studies because they believe that it will improve their English skill and to become a successful person in the future, mastering English is very essential.

This essay is too long (313 words instead of 250-265). It isn’t a problem on its own, but wasting time to write more content that you don’t get extra marks for is not wise. Also, the more content you write, the more room for mistakes you create. There are a lot of poorly structured sentences and grammatical errors (see comments underlined in blue). Overall, looks like a Band 6 - 6.5 essay.

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