January 2007

Dear Sir/Madam,

I’m writing this letter to request more information about a scholarship/ assistance offered by your College.

I was awaiting in anticipation to enroll next year for the much coveted Diploma in English, but unfortunate , I found myself in a financial difficulty.

I would appreciate it if you could steer me to the right path for scholarships information or if the college financial assistance.

My certificate in Secondary education shows above average grades. I have worked in a voluntary position on weekends teaching English to young foreign kids. I do have the means to pay back if a loan was approved by the college. My employer will vouch for my employment and provide you with a proof of my earnings. He could also arrange a monthly deduction from my salary to your bank account.

I believe I have what it takes and I trust you would consider my request, by giving me the opportunity to continue my study.

Looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours Faithfully,
M Munsamy

This is a good letter. It has the right structure, covers the task, shows a good command of the English language, the sentences range in complexity, the grammar and spelling are fine. Some minor corrections were made, see comments. Overall, this looks like a Band 7 letter.

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Dear Sir/Madam,

I’m writing this letter housekeeper as advertised in the “Daily News” on 6th of November 2007.

I have worked for the “Care-givers” home for 5 years and thereafter was transferred to the main branch in Durban. This branch caters for two hundred people. I was appointed the supervisor, with five staff reporting to me. I have gained much experience in planning, organizing and leading in this job. I have worked with all types of people and know how to handle any problems that may arise.

The reason why I would like to apply for this job is because your private home would benefit from my experience. I would be able to give much more attention to the needs of the home due to its size. My credentials . I to an interview to further discuss my experience with you.

I hope to hear from you soon.

Yours Faithfully,
M Munsamy

This is a good letter. It has the correct structure and covers the task. The sentences are mostly well structured, although some show use of inappropriate expressions. The vocabulary is fine.There are a few grammatical errors, see comments. Overall, this looks like a Band 6.5 – 7 letter.

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