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Dear Sir/Madam,

I?m writing this letter to request more information about scholarship/Finance assistance offered by your College.

I was awaiting in anticipation to enroll next year for the much coveted Diploma in English, but with unfortunate circumstance, I found myself in a financial difficulty.

I would appreciate it if you could steer me in the right path for scholarship information or if the college will be able to gave me financial assistance.

My certificate in Secondary education shows above average grades. I have worked in a voluntary position on weekends teaching English to young foreign kids. I do have the means to pay back if a loan is granted by the college. My employer will vouch for my employment and provide you with my earnings, and he could also arrange a monthly deduction from salary to your bank account.

I believe I have what it takes and I trust you would consider me setback, by giving me the opportunity to study further.

Looking forward to hear from you soon.

Yours Faithfully,
M Munsamy

This is a good letter. It has the right structure, covers the task, shows good command of English, the sentences range in complexity, the grammar and spelling are fine. Some minor corrections were made, see comments. Overall, looks like Band 7.

Dear Sir/Madam,

I?m writing this letter in response to the vacancy for housekeeper as advertised in the ?Daily News? on 6th of November 2007.

I have worked for the ?Care-givers? home for 5 years and thereafter was transferred to the main branch in Durban. This branch caters for two hundred people. I was appointed the supervisor, with five staff reporting to me. I have gained much experience in planning, organizing and leading in this job. I have worked with all types of people and know how to handle their problems.

The reason why I would like to apply for this job because your private home would benefit from my experience. I would be able to give much more attention to the needs of the home due to the size. My credentials speaks for itself which is attached for your perusal. I await for an interview to further discuss my experience with you.

I hope to hear from you soon.

Yours Faithfully,
M Munsamy

This is a good letter. It has the correct structure and covers the task. The sentences are mostly well structured, although some show use of inappropriate expressions. The vocabulary is fine.There are few grammatical errors, see comments. Overall, looks like Band 6.5 ? 7.